Room 11/12 waited patiently while Kathrine our educator was giving us some rules.
We went in a room with lots of intresting things like cameras cell phones they did not have smart phones those times.
My favourite one was tram ride.
Exploring indoor was fun I was very interested in the earthquake cafe.
I feel like to live there it was amazing but we went there to learn
Criteria for an Effective Paragraph
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Par 2
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Par 3
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Par 4
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Par 5
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⚈ Start with a topic sentence.
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⚈ Have at least 2-3 connected sentences.
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⚈ Have sentences that are effective that
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b. have juicy vocab e.g action/describing words
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(c) grammatically correct
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(d) punctuated correctly.
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(Think of 1 or 2 things that you need to to focus on next time, to make sure your paragraphs are effective.)
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Next time I need to write 2-3 sentences about each sentences.
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Well done for getting your Motat writing posted. I think you have chosen a good thing to focus on for your next piece of writing because if you have 2-3 sentences for each idea your writing will be much more interesting. Perhaps another focus could be adding more juicy vocab.
ReplyDeleteI look forward to reading your next piece of writing.